Illustrative example
Feedback tied to the words on the page
Fictional excerpt — not a complete assessment or a real student’s result.
Original
“I went into the cave. I heard a noise. I ran away.”
- What works
- The events are in a clear order, so the reader can follow what happens.
- Try next
- Every sentence starts with “I”. Start one sentence a different way, and use a sound or feeling to build suspense.
One possible rewrite · illustrative
“Suddenly, a low growl echoed through the cave.”
This changes the repeated “I” opening and uses sound to build tension for the reader.
AI-generated practice feedback, not an official NAPLAN mark.
Handwriting itself is not assessed. AI can misread writing; check and correct the transcription before assessment. Clear, well-lit photos help.